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your lovely beautiful eyes

your beautiful eyes
eyes can never get exhausted
they only exhaust.

It’s the love in one’s eyes
one remembers

and

admires at all cost,
don’t let your eyes frost.

mine are seemingly tired
now you have to take on

let eyes be the window
of thy mind
never,
ever again say
exhaust

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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The eyes have it, there seems to be an un-natural break in this piece where the line ends with "to take on" just me but there could be a few lines in here to join things up a bit.
Take care young Bard and I wait to see your reply ??

mine are seemingly tired
now you have to take on

let eyes be the window
of thy mind

Yours as always Ian.T

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

now let it be distorted
the squint
still in her eyes lies....

loved

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