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Walk A Mile... August Contest

These old shoes are re-souled for the second time around
They are heeled once again; like well behaved dogs
Sitting there with their tongues hanging out
Begging to go for a walk

I don't walk them as much as I used to
But I give them rides in the car all the time!
When we go out to the store
People stare at them and ask:
“How old are they?”

They are about ten years old
but they look like puppies
I treat them to sheep's fat a couple of times a year
Their hides are smooth and supple
They look eager to get out in the yard

I feel their embrace, the hugging of my feet
like some adoring fans or worshipers
It takes years of a relationship
to make a union such as ours
I'll take them for a walk!

Tomorrow....

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You need to put (August contest )next to title. I'll be back.........stan

things like that. Must be the old age of this dog! lol ~ Gee

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I Really like the re-souled instead go resoled. I also liked the rest of they poem. On alternative which deals with last line. It might be more effective if written ............tomorrow and put in its own stanza. I'm like you, I take the ol'boots for more rides than walks nowadays lol........stan

That's what they are made for "Walking"
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I have walked many miles and hope to walk many more, but the steps are slower and shorter all the time. ~ Gee

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and like old friends they can never truly be worn out.
I've got a pair of 15 year old Irish working boots, resoled once, fine craftsmanship, old friends.

If I one critique, it could perhaps re-enforce the metaphor between friends and shoes.

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you have to take care of them. I will look at reinforcing that metaphor like you suggest. ~ Gee

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I have a pair leather boots that peels bc of the heat in my closet in a plastic shoe box. She look so bad I don't wear her often but when it rains I may wear bc like yours mine hug my feet like and old friend.

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Looks don't matter much when the friendship is strong enough. Otherwise, I wouldn't have many friends! lol ~ Gee

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the complex and use of sample analogy and metaphors..rich detailing
make for a great story in the poem walk itself here!
I can well relate as a reader to this work...and have my own
pair of old beat up oxfords that i still use here!

Thank U!

I know that boots are important to someone who lives where you do! I like leather the best, because if you take good care of it, it will last a loooooong time! I have a few items of leather that I have had many years and they are still very serviceable! Thank you for your kind words. ~ Gee

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