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VISIONS (A Journey in Three Acts)
VISIONS
(A Journey in Three Acts)
Act-1: The Leaving
To the land of my fathers I now must return:
You know, it’s not that I care to roam.
Leaving you here, by your wheel and your urn-
Leaving love, leaving life, leaving home…
Yet, as evening must follow the morn,
All those visions, once bright, are now gone;
And the dim light of dusk is now turning to dark,
Yet I know that I must carry on-
I must carry on…
Act-2: The Realisation
Chasing faint echoes of memory through time,
I must search in the hope that I find.
As I come down the mountain, it crosses my mind
That I seek what I have left behind.
And the brightening that comes before dawn,
Brings on visions of men dead and gone-
All those heroes of legend have taught us no wrong
When they say we must persevere on-
We must persevere on…
Act-3: The Return
Retracing my footsteps through wind and through rain,
Knowing soon I’ll be dry, I’ll be warm-
Now, as I lie down beside you again,
I know that I have finally found home.
And the piper returns to his horn,
And the tillsman comes back to the corn,
And those visions of old, which drove me so cold,
Have forever and finally gone-
Yes, they’ve finally gone…
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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Asia, India
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Leonard Cohen, Bob Dylan, Roger Waters, Jim Croce, Paul Simon (...albeit not necessarily in that order)
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Psyve
Fri, 2010-12-03 09:10
Longo,
Thank you for stopping by to read and for both your comments. I am pleased you felt the sense of "malinconia" (Melancholy?) that runs thru this and through a lot of my other work also.
Incidentally, I went through several of your poems on this site and was very impressed by what I read.
I have left comments on a couple but my sense of admiration extends to more than just those.
Keep writing.
Psyve
author commentlou
Fri, 2010-12-03 07:05
HI
I like the fact that you have seperated this into three acts as in a play, if each act was expanded a little it could become an epic. Maybe you could add more description of the setting ? Just a suggestion.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Psyve
Fri, 2010-12-03 09:17
Lou
When I wrote this song, oh so very many years ago, the over riding feeling in me was just that ...medeival epic....
The artwork I drew subsequently, to accompany the song in my songbook, which you can catch a glimpse of on the Soundclick site (see hyperlink hust below my lyrics above), reinforces that vision.
Pleased you liked the feel of this piece.
Thank you for stopping by to read and comment.
Psyve
author commentPsyve
Fri, 2010-12-03 09:19
Longo
Thank you again for your very kind remarks.
P
author commentloved
Sat, 2010-12-04 08:41
You are
as outstanding
as i am standing out
and
in our unique ways
you stand out
and i also stand
But out
EARLIER
I HAD A PEN NAME
THREE VISIONS
SOme one said
ARE YOU MAD
WE HAVE TWO
THEN I REDUCED MYSELF
TO TWO
small
visionvision
NO REACTION OVER LOOKED OR
OVERRULED WHICH???????????
loved
Kailashana2
Fri, 2010-12-03 15:13
If I'd believe in past lives,
If I'd believe in past lives, I'd think you were a minstrel, a troubadour. (Ok, you're one in this life. ;-) )
A Renaissance man, in any case.
~A
Psyve
Sat, 2010-12-04 00:52
Anna
You're the second person to have called me that:a Renaissance Man.... the first time round I had to look it up to see what it meant!Thank you, that is most kind.
I assume it also means that you liked this one...
Psyve
author commentPsyve
Sat, 2010-12-04 00:56
Amal
Thank you for taking the time to listen to this song.
Thanks also for your suggestion,...not sure if that may not become too much of a reinforcemenrt of the line, tho.
Sometimes, less is more?
Psyve
author commentDalton
Mon, 2010-12-13 15:10
Thanks for sharing
To be read slowly, and I think its beautiful that way. With the last sentence of each stanza to be spoken a few seconds later... I'd love to hear this one read aloud by some great actor of our age. Well done Psyve. John
Psyve
Mon, 2010-12-13 15:28
Dalton,
Thank you for your comment.
Like most of my work on this site, this one is a song lyric.
If you'd settle for hearing a humble singer-songwriter's voice, you CAN hear this as a song by clicking on the link just below the lyric body...
Psyve
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