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In the Valley of Death and Love

My Tigers played good
Ran the big plays
Got out played

A big mouth, no humility
Two clowns poking fun
Sore winner take all

Loud mouth quarter back

It's just a game
Win some, loose one
In Tigertown

Stomped by noles
Defense shut down
In death valley

Clemson will be back

But in love-town, a lonely traveler
Walks the dark road of life
Through valley of love

Thought she connected
But you cut the power
To her love for you

In football
She saw a path to you heart
A iceberg is what she found

Game over, another lost
Like the clowns at the end
You had to be cruel

You come with apologies
Sad faces, seeking truces
It gets old

There's no water in desserts
No love in your heart
A cactus is what you become

The Tigers will regroup
But our love
Lost the test of time

Stripped of dignity and respect
My resistance is no more
Ship wrecked by your hurtful words

Motionless at the bottom of the sea
My love for you
Rest in peace

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You GO GIRL! Cynicism and no regrets is what I'm getting here. Gloria Gaynor anybody!? ;)

There's no water in desserts
No love in your heart
A cactus is what you become
Prickly little character indeed!! ;)
Nice one Barbara
NS

Thanks for reading and sharing. Not sure what you mean by cynicism

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Thanks for reading and sharing. Not sure what you mean by cynicism

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I have no criticism, just appreciation of the poem.
Absolutely, painfully wonderful with emotion, fatalism and anger.

Bookmarked.

Respectfully, Jim

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thanks for Reading and sharing "painfully wonderful with emotion, fatalism and anger." just what i was going for.lol

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