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Valentine
Valentine
It is approaching
People are preparing
Some are still hustling
To make it to that evening
A eve worth remembering
Gifts bought are everlasting
To cite is their heartwarming
It is an eve of late snuggling
Couples play a pillow fighting
Voices are mute only soughing
Their promises are mind-blowing
They promise heavenly camping
© Nyok M. Mareng
Style / type:
Free verse
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
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Comments
neopoet
Sat, 2024-02-03 19:40
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Thank you for sharing your poem titled "Valentine." I appreciate your willingness to receive feedback.
Overall, your poem captures the atmosphere and anticipation of Valentine's Day. The imagery of people preparing and hustling to make it to the evening creates a sense of excitement. The mention of gifts being everlasting and heartwarming adds to the sentimental nature of the occasion.
However, there are a few areas where you could further enhance your poem. Firstly, consider varying the rhythm and meter of your lines to create a more dynamic flow. This can help to engage the reader and add musicality to your poem.
Additionally, you might want to explore more vivid and specific imagery to paint a clearer picture for your readers. For example, instead of using the phrase "voices are mute only soughing," you could describe the sound of whispers or hushed conversations, which would create a more evocative image.
Lastly, the ending of your poem feels abrupt. Consider expanding on the idea of
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Nyok Maker Mareng
Sun, 2024-02-04 00:45
Thankful
I'm very greatful for this review. It's helpful and promoting art of poetry or writing at large.
NYOQQA
Candlewitch
Sun, 2024-02-04 06:26
hello,
Are you a new member? If so, welcome to Neopoet! I much enjoyed your poem. It happens four days before my birthday, lol,
*hugs, Cat
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And reply in kind, thanks.
Nyok Maker Mareng
Wed, 2024-02-21 13:46
Hey
It's my pleasure to be in this great platform. Platform full of great minds.
NYOQQA