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Mother's lap

Mother's lap
Is the charging ground
When our strengths is getting finished
It's the comfort zone that we dreams to live

Mother's lap
Is the only entrusted light
That enlightened our life everlastingly
When the gloom of this brutal world ruined us

Mother's lap
Is the hiding zone
When the worldly burdens
And its fades disgust and suffocated our lives

Mother's lap
Is ever the coldest point
When the scorching sun smile against us
It's the resting home when we are weary

Mother's lap
Is always the warmest room
When the winter coldness is freezing us
It's the aspire blanket of every living soul

Mother's lap
Is the drinking stream of consciousness
When unconsciousness flooded our arena
It's the safety and merely dry land of all time

Mother's lap
Is the best medication for fatigue and anxiety
When they stranded us in the wilderness
It's the soothing pillow for the brain and heart

Mother's lap
Is the everlasting life jacket
When the world is drowning us
In the ocean of violences and inhumanities

Mother's lap
Is the only pave road
That is free from bump and traffic jams
On her laps we always feel the peace of mind

Mother's lap
Is the fountain of love
The fetching pool of humanity
When our innocent souls are brutalized

©NYOK MAKER MARENG

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in this line: When our strengths( is) getting finished change (is) to are
in this line: It's the comfort zone that we dream(s) to live remove the "s"
It's the (aspire) blanket of every living soul (remove aspire)
When (unconsciousness) flooded our arena use (oblivion)
In the ocean of (violences) and inhumanities change to: (violence)
Is the only (pave) road change to: (paved)
That is free from bump and traffic jams : bump(s)
On her laps we always feel the peace of mind: lap( remove (s)

a very nice poem...any mother would be pleased with this testimonial!
*hugs, Cat

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