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Untitled Haiku

Love is a violin,
The high E grips my heart strings
never to let go.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Last few words: 
This is one haiku I'm thinking of using to build a book of Haiku.
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Where's haiku is itself a strictly guarded structure by purists , so many syllables to a line and all that, I am personally not impressed with that take. I believe a very short poem which has a certain sense of paradox or abstract between 2 or more images works. I think the images here connect on that universe and makes a poem. It is unique to some of you previous entries in that it is both personal and impersonal at the same time. Your range is expanding and it is a joy to watch!

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

Thanks!

"Poetry is music for the human voice. Until you actually speak it or someone speaks it, it has not come into it's own."
- Maya Angelou

author comment

I've tried building a 'body of haikus' with some degree of success-
https://www.neopoet.com/node/2669

I can see where you could take yours in several directions.

cheers,
Jess
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Me, too.

It's about the heart's strings. Opera and a good haiku does that to me too. Enjoyed the tugging.

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