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Bundle of Joy
My heart’s found joy
That lines this day
My baby boy
Is awake to play
God bless this child, forever love
We seek your protection from above
Ten tiny fingers
Touch the sky
Ten little toes
Kick mommy’s thigh
Days sing your youth, may you be spared
The years of truth, adults have beared
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Structured: Western
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raj
Fri, 2018-10-05 14:28
Hi TH
the profound joy is very vividly expressed in lovely poem....God Bless!
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raj (sublime_ocean)
scribbler
Fri, 2018-10-05 17:55
Hi T
The joy of welcoming a new life into one's world is a special one isn't it? Good write........stan
Geezer
Fri, 2018-10-05 20:43
Nice work!
Nice to see you working! Geezer.
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IRiz
Fri, 2018-11-23 11:30
Sweet and cute!!!
Sweet and cute!!!
IRiz