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I stay hidden away
From the unknown
Tucked beneath the covers
Where one thing is certain,
It’s dark.

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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thought T. Harmonee, but if this is true, don't stay there for long , just an advice.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

Just a poem inspired by a feeling I and everyone else naturally feels about things that are new.
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"Poetry is music for the human voice. Until you actually speak it or someone speaks it, it has not come into it's own."
- Maya Angelou

author comment

I echo comment of Rula

I feel there is no place for "away" in line 1
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raj (sublime_ocean)

and something you enjoy reading over several times. Has just the right amount of thought-fullness, humor, and irony. Nice!

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

a real little gem, so many connotations flow from here

T

The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

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