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Love (Recon 31)

Pa says we must avoid at all cost
soy effervescence! he must be right--
we always do just what he says
schools promote sins and abominations--he preaches!

we never go to churches since he
stands outside a different one each week with gram-ma
preaching against the contamination
of soy effervescence in such detail:

explaining how it may be sprayed
on your food without your knowledge--
how it will age you prematurely--
weakening bones, stiffening joints
leading to premature brain addlement!

You Hazuki, how did you handle your abusive coach
and pesky father? for volleyball mastery
does not come to the timid!

your lips of cherry cycles in vermilion
drink in the juice of inspiration: mixed with pomegranate
your eyes of apple green, transforming into deep pools of obsidian
(obsessive) --your skin in tones of peach and rose blossoms

defying peace, your deadly beacons penetrate my feeble
intents and striking out, I fail to move you!
what feeble writings, my vain communications in imagination...

how can I arrange pearls,
rubies, absinthe with peppermint
granite stones crying out to Dante...

who greets/meets Helen Vendler's suppositions
on the positions of addressees --
tones of celestial versus sensual adoration
and redemption? red lights admit only
yellow emergency fliers...

After A.P. drones forbidden on account
of excess acidity or below minimal bass desires!

what a shame, You Hazuki, you
will not be born
for a century of two,
my dearest dreaming love!

I invite you
just once
to pass through me
to imbibe my
life forces...

just once....

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Last few words: 
I wrote an interactive sci-fi novel aroung 1990 which I have redone and posted a couple of times. The order of the chapters is not important since it is called RECONSTRUCTION OF THE MISSION OF '06 and consists of modules of documents found in a scrambled order. Here is part 31. I don't put Eastern or Western since it is sci-fi and my excuse for throwing in anything I am thinking, writing or congealing.
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