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Thoughts Adrift

My thoughts
Rise from the shore;
Again, as before,

They cross the bay,
Seek out a crest
And come to rest.

One gull
Glides into view—
Could it be you

The misty sea
For me?

You turn away
Into the haze,
As always.

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Those last three stanzas hit home. Amazing job! I really like the rhythm you use, and I feel like you perfectly captured longing and loneliness.

"The true alchemists do not turn lead into gold; they turn the world into words." -William H. Gass

thank you so very much for liking my little poem. No, lonely I am not; I am simply a chameleon, well versed in changing my appearance--figuratively, of course. I appreciate your kind comment . Van.

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Hello, Van,
What beautiful sentiment and imagery.
Thank you,

I wish to thank you very much for your thoughtfully expressed comment. Thank you. Van (aka Jerry)

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but to you poetry comes
as an instinct
as in my mind poets views
instantly sink
and i compose comments
and say amen
take em as my poems
and most do
you will too
ask Gee will you

but actually I'm a libra chameleon. Nevertheless, I appreciate your comment.

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also time specifications of birth r important lol ryan tc

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