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Thirty Four Years...

Submitted by Geezer on Tue, 2023-02-14 03:23

Soft eyes and a smile or two
you gazing my way
our Valentine's Day for two

Style / type:

Structured: Eastern

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

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What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

How does this theme appeal to you?

Editing stage:

Editing - polished draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Geezer

Tue, 2023-02-14 09:08

Frankly...

I can't see how she has put up with me so long. Thanks for the read and comment. ~ Geez.
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Rosewood Apothecary

Tue, 2023-02-14 19:37

I say that all the time

I. Am. Impossible. Loads of emotions fly around of nearly every variant. The wife just does the impossible everyday.

Tim

Seren

Tue, 2023-02-14 05:15

Dearest Bro

Send my love to your love, it's gorgeous the connection you guys have,

I have always said how nice it would be if someone wrote a valentine's poem for me. it's a gift I've never been blessed to received but you first need a partner in crime. lol

Congratulation's sweets I will talk to you soon.

love and higgliest bugs Sis xox

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Geezer

Tue, 2023-02-14 09:19

I have written one for her, almost every single Valentine's Day, [I may have missed a couple by being sick.]
Thanks Sis, we love you too. She says; "She's just been hanging with the wrong blokes!" LoL. Actually, she said; "She's just been hanging out with the wrong guys, try the little ones, they try harder!" We're having take-out Chinese tonight, maybe watch some movie or something. Just us! ~ Geez.
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Seren

Tue, 2023-02-14 20:59

Dearest Bro

I roared with laughter

"Try the little ones they try harder"

Oh my God I adore her she's hilarious

Tell her at nearly 6ft? my first boyfriend was a litt'un and the disparity in our Heights was incredible lmao I couldn't wear heels. I'm over 6ft in heels. Hahahaha

Tell her to find a nice tall one for me lol

Love you both dearly higgliest bugs Jayne xoxb

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

lovedly

Tue, 2023-02-14 06:51

CONGRATS GEEZ

As they told me HAIKU you call THE EAST ///has to have 17 words or ///
three lines verse as
575
yours appears as 757
I think I don't count syllables you know.... so ask someones who does know ...
ANY way congrats to your wife
she extracted from you a haikueeeeeeeeeeeee
and yes HAIKUS ARE
basically Japanese

Geezer

Tue, 2023-02-14 09:25

Yeah, I know...

traditional Haiku are 5-7-5 but we are untraditional types, anyway. The two of us, always been just a little of the black sheep of the family. Guess that's what brought us to the place we were, at the time we met. Both of us climbed a rocky road to the overlook where we are now. Thanks for the read and comment, ~ Geez.
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lovedly

Tue, 2023-02-14 11:34

just great

Gee now happy you B
B=brevity

Jackweb

Tue, 2023-02-14 12:59

Congratulations Gee..!

Her enthralling beauty must be one in a million.
" Soft eyes and a smile".
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Geezer

Tue, 2023-02-14 22:39

She has to be...

one in a million, in order to keep me in check! LoL~ Geez.
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Lavender

Tue, 2023-02-14 14:45