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SunKu 9
Blue skies
dark as night
jazz on my mind
can’t shake
disconnected
lingers inside
no gift
to sing jazz
I write the blues
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raj
Tue, 2018-02-20 13:25
Good one Barbara
Good one Barbara
raj (sublime_ocean)
Barbara Writes
Tue, 2018-02-20 15:11
Thanks
I’m getting there
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IRiz
Tue, 2018-02-20 15:11
I relate to your poem very
I relate to your poem very much
IRiz
Barbara Writes
Tue, 2018-02-20 16:18
Thanks
Thanks for reading
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Sparrow
Tue, 2018-02-20 18:29
Barbara
Once again you have captured the Sunku way of writing.
Loved the music as it echoed around.
Yours Ian.x
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Barbara Writes
Wed, 2018-02-21 08:21
Thanks Ian
I trying to get. Just hope the way sticks in me. Lol I’ll forget when I start to write because I write from inspiration and spontaneity often. I’m reading and writing a lot so I can master the SunKu way without having to think about the way.
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raj
Wed, 2018-02-21 10:38
Hi Barbara,
Hi Barbara,
If I may suggest, since it seems that you prefer not to give a title to the Sunku, you may suffix it with a number or date as you may find befitting. Even if not, consider this as just a friendly suggestion and let it pass.
It is such a good experience reading your posts. Please keep posting. I read all of them.
Hugs and regards...
raj (sublime_ocean)
Barbara Writes
Wed, 2018-02-21 11:44
Thanks
For suggestions I’ll number them
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