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of stupidity!

Submitted by loved on Thu, 2012-08-23 06:11

he was stupid
his Stupidity ...
a word
we ought not to use in poetry

well the end was well for him
he having become a celebrity
only coz of his stupidity.

Some day perhaps
it may well be me,
as master here says
I too know
no fuckin' poetry
only he does perhaps
and
so who will miss me?
he or none
that we'll have to see
Albeit ,
I am sure to be remembered by many
including him
and
of course you too,
and
perhaps only you two

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Ian.T

Fri, 2012-08-24 13:57

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This only made sense as a comment that you made, to make it into a poem there must be a reason or a person that the theme is about.
Stupidity is a state of being but you sorted that out in the second stanza, and that was it then you wandered off as if talking about yourself.
Now come on I check your works every time they appear on the stream, this is the second or third time you have repeated a comment as a poem they don't seem to work in that arena..
I wait for your straight forward works that I always read and like,
Yours Ian.T

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So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Fri, 2012-08-24 14:21

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Jess 's unwarranted comments
gave me gripes but then
you always remind me
he has em...

'twas stupid of me
I feel sad more
than pity
as their cancer is worse...
than my ego one.....
shall compose ..
once i retain from the catastrophe
of reading comments
as callous as can be
from a guy who bloats......
blasphemy...
and guys of our ilk ....allow it and ignore him fallaciously ,
what a shame
a frightful pity .
Ian believe me..
OBNOXIOUS AT THE BEST ... OR WORST..
WHATEVER IT MAY BE..

loved

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scribbler

Fri, 2012-08-24 14:53

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Nobody can please everybody so just post your POETRY (not commentary which belongs in blogs lol) and hope to please a few as I do..............stan

loved

Sat, 2012-08-25 00:20

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you will like it too.
RUNNING SHORT of time,
to compose some worthy poetry ,
shall shortly
thanks to Ian and thee..

loved

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Ian.T

Fri, 2012-08-24 16:17

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Stan has agreed with me, so now I hope with respect that we will see some great poetry come from your pen,
You take care young Bard,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Sat, 2012-08-25 00:27

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so does appreciation too....
in the minds of friends
and well wishers Ian like you.

Shall compose as I awake,
from the tiredness of slumber,
that shrouds my mind like a cucumber..
ha ha ha ha.
what non challant nonsense
coz i don' want to post the comment
as again, you all lament.
and i don't desire in my frail body a dent

loved

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Ian.T

Sat, 2012-08-25 02:45

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There is but the twinkling of an eye twix your now, and Sadie's now.
It will matter not that you squawk as a drowning man as he goes down for the last time, no one will care of that twinkling in the now.
So what we can all do, is write our best before we take that step..
It may have already happened ???
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Sat, 2012-08-25 05:36

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life
You will be happy to see ...
I have composed one off my nerve...
u will like it

loved

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weirdelf

Sat, 2012-08-25 06:45

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I possibly deserve a suspension, but for editing the comment.
But you do really say some dumb things.

Do me a favour and post the link to which I said it. I could perhaps make amends.

You know I say some cruel things, but generally with a purpose,

cheers,
Jess
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weirdelf

Sat, 2012-08-25 06:52

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write poetry, not vindictive gripes. Especially write one poem, not post the same poem as irrelevant comments on other people's poetry.

Get off the oestrogen.

cheers,
Jess
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'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
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