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Sometimes I think love is...

I wish for a love like a child wishes for gifts
I long to know what this mysterious feeling is like
will I recognize the scent like a mother's homemade cookies?
will I hear it like someone calling my name?
will I feel it wrap around me and fill me with joy?

Sometimes I think I can taste it when I eat alone at a restaurant
it tastes like the summer sun and lemonade on a scolding day
it tastes like hot cocoa and snuggling by the fire when it's cold
it tastes like sipping tea with your pinky up and giggling with friends

Sometimes I think I can hear it when I'm watching TV alone at home
It sounds like kids playing and screaming at the playground
it sounds like family's belting out songs that they all know
it sounds like friends finishing each other's sentences

Sometimes I think I can feel it when I walk alone down the hallway at school
It feels like dancing with friends and holding your crush's hands
it feels like hugging your parents when you're crying from a bad day
it feels like doing your secret handshake with your best friend

Without love it feels like a game of hide and seek, but where you never get found
it's like being the last kid to be picked for dodgeball
it's like that one french fry that falls between the seats never to be seen again
it's like sitting at a lunch table alone in the cafeteria
it's like being surrounded by people but no one notices you

Maybe my senses just will never come by love

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Last few words: 
sorry i know this is depressing
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Comments

your language use is very good and does not require thinking about, it tells the story. The pace is steady and no surprises.
I enjoyed the theme; as it details what people might think of when they think about what is love? It was/is not depressing as it lets me know that you do, indeed know what love is. It is all those things and more! It is even the disappointments, the hardships and the day to day things that go wrong. No matter what anyone says; they do not wake up and smile through the whole day! Watch the people around you. Look at their face when they experience some small disappointment, you will often see a flash of a frown. We are very complex beings and it takes the whole gamut and range of emotions to express Love!
When you see the way that it can transform a person, you will understand, that without Yin there is no Yang, without the dark, there can be no day. A very good poem!~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

Start with self
then keep adding
from ones own womb
to universal tombs

you will need more experience to find out
what LOVE really is
it's UNDEFINABLE

You will soon realize it ....as you become as old as me
great vision still
I 'd grant to ye VIVI

are all different from being
ill
and do return a comment.... if you desire to shine on neo's strength ....I have always done ask Gee
I also remove poems he dislikes off me

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