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Sweet, Romantic, Dangerous
Why would you think the romance is safe?
the love is the most dangerous act of all
Does the passion make you shiver?
The touch that's really little is sometimes the worst of all
A romance is breakneck, a romance is safe,
a love is grave, however.
I saw the the undying love of my generation destroyed,
How I mourned the affection.
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neopoet
Sun, 2023-04-02 17:32
Neopoet AI
The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
As an AI language model, I cannot provide a critique of the poem as I don't have emotions. However, I can offer one suggested line edit to improve the poem's flow and clarity:
Original line: A romance is breakneck, a romance is safe,
Proposed line edit: A romance is breakneck, but never safe,
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Geezer
Sun, 2023-04-02 20:15
I like this a lot...
I agree with the AI's line, because it follows that while a romance is breakneck and maybe fun, it could turn to love and become serious. I think that is what you are thinking, that you think that falling in love could have serious consequences.
Nice job! Keep them coming! ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack
Mon, 2023-04-03 08:47
There is
Much truth in this. We often believe in fairy tales and that romance is something safe and beautiful...in reality, love is one of the scariest, intense and damaging things we can do and feel. Well done!
~RoseBlack~
Geezer
Mon, 2023-04-03 09:31
You forgot...
to add that it can also be one of the most rewarding things that can happen to any of us. ~ Geez.
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Rosewood Apothecary
Tue, 2023-04-04 19:02
It’s intense
I have feelings for my wife that are hard to bottle and sometimes harder to express. Luckily she’s not annoyed by my doting.
Things weren’t always great. First we were just kids. Then we had kids. Then we lost ourselves and each other in the business of having a family. It took a lot of work and contemplation. In our case we both agreed that we still wanted a life together but that life would look differently than what we were doing. That meant we had figure stuff out both alone and together and it took a few years to get to some of our goals.
I honestly say, I didn’t have any clue what healthy relationships looked like or how they worked. Now that I feel like I’m on my way to a better understanding of myself and what I’d like to get out of my marriage and my friendships I think I’m a better partner, parent, and friend.
Don’t misconstrue this as piousness, I am still capable and have been guilty of behaving like a colossal turd. I’m a work in progress.
Love hurts and it’s hard work even when it’s easy.
Tim
Viviana Smith
Wed, 2023-04-05 10:37
aww
Thanks so much for this.
I haven't been able to open up to my mom about our relationship because she doesn't really support the lgbtq community, so it means a lot that you a random person give me advice. I will keep this with me for the rest of my life.
ty,
Kisses,
Vivi
author commentGeezer
Wed, 2023-04-05 11:18
Don't let...
the fact that she doesn't support the lgbtq movement define your relationship with her! People are more than their sexual orientation and deserve to be treated like anyone else. If you are or have friends that are of a different persuasion, it doesn't color the whole picture of them or you. Sex is such a small part of who we are! I think in our quest for acceptance, no matter what the issue, we feel as though if you are not accepting, you are against, and we try harder to make our case. If it is a subject that we can't agree on, we should be willing to forego arguments for and against and relate to each other on a different level. My wish for you, is to let your mother make up her own mind about what she will and will not accept. I suspect that if she is as smart as you are, she will find that many people that are of the lbgtq community and don't look like it, are very fine and good people and she would never know! Good luck with your mom.
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