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see nature through my eyes

see nature through my eyes
as I sit at my window sill …..
pitter patters fall raindrops still ….
now the thunder comes roaring from far ….
thunder god is annoyed so far ….
then comes, another splash of lightening …
preceding, another thunderous volley….
flowers in the wind still dance about ….
in summer like spring, rains are welcome no doubt ….

but then it’s getting dark and cold ….
ere the sunrise hopefully tomorrow we are told
the flowers will in the wind blow …..
that will be a lovely show….

chill here is nature’s gift …
the sun may be bright, but swift
but chill in the breeze …
makes human beings freeze…

nature is lovely come and see ….
from my window sill, a honey be
see through my eyes …
how beautiful nature smiles…
ere the morning sunrise…

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Just a couple of things to sort out in this one, the lines you wrote:-
then comes, another volley of lightening …
preceding another thunderous threatening …
Seem so stressed I nearly had a breakdown lol

nature is lovely come and sees …. Drop the "s" in sees
from my window sill so lovely… Another word for "lovely" is needed
or see through my eyes …, You can drop the "or"
how nature smiles…
Young Bard I will leave the rest up to your thoughts, take to yourself a fine brush and finish the painting with excellence,
Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

suitably modified any better now ?


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