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seasonal life

Submitted by loved on Wed, 2013-02-13 18:41

life is really seasonal as is
some poets poetry
stages of life so well depicted,

from birth to death do remember me
as the fall does,
of human bondage relieve,
grieve not of my being ere,
remember me with love
throughout the year
if you so care

the autumn of my life arrives,
the horizon is distant,
yet, not bare
so to live another day
let me continue to dare..

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Ian.T

Fri, 2013-02-15 09:25

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No one is forgotten in the way of all things,
each has a part to play no matter how small,
That they toil is for the good of all,
That we should tend to our own tasks here.

Some spend all the seasons working through
So that those that leave early will be held true.
There is never one soul left out no matter what
So live the best way in the life you have got..

Just a thought La La

This line if you take out the (he) the poem doesn't become so fixed, then the rest can flow as it wishes to by its maker, Yours Ian.T
.
stages of life he so well depicts,

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Fri, 2013-02-15 12:05

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donnedddd.......

loved

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