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Saving Earl...

An acorn falls from the tree
Plunk, on Simon's head
The cat jumps a little sideways
Says; "Earl Squirrel, you're dead!"

Earl doesn't pay him mind
Just laughs and goes his way
Simon nurses a bump
Thinks about "Someday!"

The cats all snicker catty
Giving little jabs and pokes
Simon says; "Shut up!"
"I'll get him for his jokes"

Earl the little squirrel
Dines on Bessie's corn
She moos at him and wishes
Earl a pleasant morn

Bessy likes to see him
Crawl up in the loft
Speaks to him each morning
She likes his fur, so soft

One day he's eating breakfast
Above dear Bessie's stall
The cats are watching closely
Hoping that he falls

It's early in the morning
The dogs are sleeping still
Little Earl is careless
The cats close in for the kill

But dear Bessie is awake
She's looking out for Earl
She steps upon a cat tail
A screech of pain, wakes up the world

An apology from Bessie
"Oh, I'm sorry dear
I wasn't looking where I'm stepping
I didn't see you near

Now, Simon's tail is crooked
The others don't mention it
Because every time they do
He's so mad that he could spit

Earl Squirrel stays in the rafters
And high up in the tree
He's careful not to fall
Just as careful as can be

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Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Last few words: 
For the girls.
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Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Yes! More shenanigans from Simon on the farm! I love Bessie, and I have a feeling Simon will never get by her. Hopefully he learns soon. Great job with rhyme and flow. I'm so glad no squirrels were injured in the making of this poem. Thanks for the laugh!
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the idea! It took a little, but I finally got the flow right and bang! Like Emeril, I got it! I enjoy making you guys smile and hope that I can give you guys some ideas too! ~ Geez.
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The story is tantalizing. Nice piece.

Bathe yourself with poetry and let the world go to pieces.

Always nice to hear from you, I appreciate your read and comments. ~ Geez.
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I don't know if you all realize it, but this is part of my plan to get you all to try doing some rhyme! I figure, that if I make it fun
and interesting enough, you will try it! Thanks so much for your encouragement and ideas! Glad to make you smile! ~ Geez.
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a challenge! How about cows, cats or squirrels? Maybe the chickens?~ Geez.
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AHHHHH This is hilarious!!!! XD XD And that last stanza.... I can see why everyone is writing farmyard poems now! Amazing job as always, and the rhyme and rhythm is right on point.

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Sometimes, it's easy to get into a mode and write in a certain vein. This just happens to be something that most people can relate to and it really is fun to give animals a voice. Thanks for your [as always] great comments and encouragement! Maybe you should try one? ~ Geez.
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