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Royalty...

Her purple-dyed faux fur jacket
made her look like one of those
lucky rabbit feet on a chain

Oblivious to the stares
she strutted her stuff
in her Uggs and Lapland ear-muffed hat

Eyes glazed in shopping mode
she ran rampant through her list
wrestling her credit to the ground

Elbows bloodied from making way in the crowds
she's good with her social-conscience
she refrains from kicking them when they are down

Cash-strapped and credit-bound
her only remorse is that she can't ransom
the smile she started with

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lucky rabbits foot would be quite acceptable here
love the poem sounds lie black friday can't get over how much you writing has improved from a few years back

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