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Rat shaped mat (Shel Silverstein)

A rat sat on a mat
It was a little mat in the shape of a hat
The rat fell asleep to dreams of a bat
Then along came a really fat cat
The fat cat yawned and then he sat on the mat
Now there's a mat in the shape of a rat

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have thought that your poet would be Dr. Seuss, who wrote many poems of this type. Very good! I was intrigued with who this person was and went to look him up. I was very surprised to learn that he was a prolific poet, author of books and a cartoonist! Much more interesting than Dr. Seuss! Thank you for giving me someone new to read. Good job! ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

but i wanted to do a shel silverstien poem. he was the guy who first got me into poetry with his funny quirky poems.

Kisses,
Vivi

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ohhh, I really like this play on words! it is very clever! good girl!

*hugs, Cat
ever, eddy styx

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A flashback to my childhood and Where The Sidewalk Ends! I thought this was really great. The words flowed together easily and created a simple, yet slightly comical story. Well done!

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