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Priceless

How pathetic it is
when a man sees his value in currency
though he is born priceless!

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is this little gem Khalid.
I like its brevity.

Try replacing "when" Line 3 with "though"
and remove the ",,," .You don't need them really.
Much enjoyed.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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done the edit.

Alid

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Very nice I can find nothing to suggest its a polished little gem

well done my friend

love and hugs JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

By the way, come check out "Listen","The Frustrated Zombie" and "Vampires' Night" when you have the time. the first one is very emotional as I was helping a friend , going through her divorce, the second one is for fun, asked by Stan and the last is a dark poem asked by Wesley. Tell me what you think.I'm still not good with meter.

Alid

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