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Pain in My Flesh and Bone 

There is no love like your love
Except one from above
A love that never fails
When hit by falling hail

Your love makes me forget, searing pain 
Scorching my flesh, my mouth
A love that helps me endure hard times
when nothing else will do

I can't sleep at night, awake till late
Can't walk at dawn, body won't move
When the pain is intense, driving me insane
I play games on my iPad for hours on end

My good days are few, I move like the wind
My bad days are many, I  bare up under the pressure
Riding in my black aveo, to escape my bed of affliction
Playing games, writing poetry, surfing my favorite websites

Before I die this spring, I hope to pass my programming class
Writing codes, creating programs, apps and games, for pay
But, now I've sunk back into despair,  where I belong
Having no one to relate to are call my friend 

It's three fifteen in the morning
And I'm wide awake, writing this sad, depressing poem

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I wish I could say something besides "the poem is really good." I'm not very good at it, but I'll pray for you.
wesley

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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Dear friend you have got me very worried, since you have said certain in your poem. A very good but sad poem i might add, but, so worrying. Love Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

This poem made my heart sink for you. But It is a testament t your courage and strength and out of your pain you have created poetry. I know what you are feeling.ou have all of us to talk to

Ultimately, you are your own best friend and only you will find the ways to win you battled Life finds a way.

Joe

flow like does the Thames
and may your troubles vanish
as you compose
and other lesser poets and readers before you
do banish
get well soon...

loved

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