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Not Alone Primal Poetry

not alone
in the darkness
thick forest
empty trail...

cabin overgrown
little girl
grassy town...

beyond the prairie
open field darkness everywhere...

path through the trees
many faces appear with me
in the darkness
light comes forth...

end of the grassy road
light brighter than day
opened the way to the cosmos
darkness retreat
into the expanse I go
where dreams are...

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If you were there, Barbara, please tell how you got there because it's where I wish to go.
If you were there in mind and body then you have done it.
In this line:
end of the grassy toad
did you mean to say:
end of the grassy road(?)
This write is pure, Barb.
Later,

~Mark~

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I saw the error when I was proof reading and still forgot to change it...thanks for pointing out..not physically but mind I was

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not a hippy meditation session, I've been reluctant to offer any visual guides for fear of tainting your vision.

However a trick that works for many people is to visualise a cave entrance, nothing scary, just a path, as you follow it you will find yourself in a new realm. Describe who and what you meet and see.

A gently warning, if the the place feels hostile, just leave. There are an infinite number of places to go.

Some imagine a huge tree, possibly 'Yggdrasil' in Norse mythology, as as you climb amongst its huge branches you will again emerge into another realm.

cheers,
Jess
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What?

~Mark~

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I don't know what you don't understand.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet is a workshop. Poets take the time to read and think about your work and offer suggestions.
There is no obligation to make any changes however please acknowledge critique and comments.

What's wrong with a meditation, hippy or otherwise?
Why comment on my comment this is about Barbara's poem?
Jeesh,

~Mark~

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mixed up comments to you and Barbara,
sorry mate.

cheers,
Jess
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A lovely journey will read the second stage in a moment, GREAT xx

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Great work Barbara.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet is a workshop. Poets take the time to read and think about your work and offer suggestions.
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yes i knew i could do it but needed your tool to help me get these primal visions from my third eye to the paper ...in word form words....it's like a painting..

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