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A New Year's Thanx
Every year, we "let our hair down"
and celebrate with solstice cheer,
we over-eat, get extravagant,
drink too much champagne, or beer.
We spend too much, try & do too much,
and party up a storm;
all the while steady complaining
how last year barely kept us warm!
How it didn't quite live up to be
a better year than the one before;
funny, how last year's complaints
we seem to forget, or else ignore.
But, what we end up believing in
is simply defined as hope;
it's in our human nature
for to make it easier, to cope.
So, after things wind down for me
and there's some time, I can afford;
I'll spend my new year remembering
to always, thank the Lord.
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
How does this theme appeal to you?
Last few words:
Just a thought.
Editing stage:
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Comments
Seren
Mon, 2013-01-07 02:17
Dear Doc
A sobering thought but with a light at the end of the poem
I cant see anything I would change, I really like this one doc
nice work
love JC x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
docmaverick
Mon, 2013-01-07 03:19
10 - Q...
....Ms. dippity.
doc.
Neopoet is "newtriffic" !
...from the heart, or a reasonable faxcimile;
david a. goodwin #{:>{)} @==
Jenifer James
Mon, 2013-01-07 03:29
Hi David, I am a new girl on
Hi David, I am a new girl on the block, saying hello to all and sundry. this is such a happy poem, a gentle reminder of what is real to YOU. Thank you.
Jenifer Jaspa James
Geezer
Mon, 2013-01-07 05:05
I like...
your theme and the rhythm. A teeny bit ragged here and there, but all-in-all, a great effort. i would leave out a few words here and there, but I'm sure that you can figure out which ones they are. Reading aloud, will help.
Nice start to the New Year. ~ Gee
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place