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MOURNING SUN

MOURNING SUN

The sun burns steel cold
sharp and cutting
reaching the depths of me.
I don’t hear birds singing
anymore.
and the noise
of all living things
sends shock waves
into my brain.

Did you know how much
I loved you
did you know how much
you meant to me
what do I do now
where do I go from here

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That was agreat compliment, my friend.

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Real men can be sensitive too.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Managing Directors, with Richard (themoonman)

We're all still little boys, Jess,, and when we are dying we call for our mothers. Ask anyone who works in a hospice,

I once said to you that no man can truly measure another man's pain, I think you can do a better job than I did,''

Joe

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A beauty of a piece that held the feelings close, where do you go from here you asked.
If only we knew young Joe, but if they told us a series of truths, we would still be lost as to our final journey, but I will see you on the other side..
Take care young man, Yours Ian.T

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I hope so, Ian.

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Wow! Joe! You have reached your core. Congratulations!

Love,
Anna

Thank you ,my Anna

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Starting to read this, I thought at first "Oh well, just another angst poem".
Then I read the second stanza.
My gods, man, you hit the target, the loss, dead on. Sharp, clear and anguished.
Simply wonderful.

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

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Another "angst poem,", huh? Why I oughta. LOL. This one surprised me too, Jim.

Thanks,

Joe

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speechless
like any ordinary folk like me
would be....

too deep for a soul
to seep

loved

You are no way "ordinary", my friend.

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are still so discerning
it marvels me

How I wish some day
I too could be
like thee

loved

Btw is steal or is it steel cold ? (Both would work, Joe).

"steel", thanks, Anna.

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