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is the moon only there when observed?

Submitted by judyanne on Sun, 2012-08-05 01:20

scientists have now decided (deep study they have started)
the atom holds the key to map the cosmos yet uncharted
they now believe, to understand the mighty universe
we need perceive the workings of the minute micro-verse

it would appear the tiny’s strange, it seems we cannot know
we can’t predict what will occur within the microscopic flow
but even more amazing, or so say the articles
the quantum is an enigmatic character of particles

observation changes, the physicists all rave
the way they will present themselves and how they will behave
dependent whether they are being watched or being ignored
the small things all behave of different nature and accord

they can be, it would seem, in more than one place, even time
a wave or particle – there seems no reason and no rhyme
our choice determines what will be the status of electrons
it seems it all depends on human conscious interactions

quantum physics thus suggests so blatantly to some
alone within humanity’s unique imagination
reality’s a figment, kept within our minds and held
and we create what seems to be illusion of our world
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Rula

Sun, 2012-08-05 17:04

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and it all depends on how we like to see things

Brave of you dear juddy to put scientific facts in verse.I really enjoyed and got new information.

but I am not sure why you haven't maintained the rhyme in the last two stanzas unless I've missed something. But still I enjoyed the read.

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judyanne

Mon, 2012-08-06 12:42

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lol - i've written a few - love science, love poetry

as for the rhyme - lol - i claim near rhyme
and there is a subtle change in the text of the write in the last stanza :)

love judy xxx

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Roscoe Lane

Sun, 2012-08-05 18:42

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Took a little while to catch the flow, but once i'd read it a few times i was away. Loved it and i believe i'm cleverer now than before i'd read it. Great poem. Love Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

judyanne

Mon, 2012-08-06 12:44

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that i learned you something to make you feel cleverer lol
thanks so much
love judy xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
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judyanne

Mon, 2012-08-06 12:47

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the latest i hear is that we live in a hologram reflected (or whatever it is that holograms do) from the edges of the universe...
truly, we live in a world of imaginative wonder... i so love science

thanks for the comments
love judd xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
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Geezer

Sun, 2012-08-05 21:42

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to me, that the more we think we know, the less we understand. ~ Gee

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judyanne

Mon, 2012-08-06 12:48

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so true...
thanks for the read and comment
love judy xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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scribbler

Sun, 2012-08-05 22:01

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I've heard this dicussed before. It goes along with the theory that men only say stupid things if a woman hears it lol..................stan

judyanne

Mon, 2012-08-06 12:53

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yes - no, it's not the latest news of course.... i saw an old doco the other day, and this write fell out... lol of me, not the tv :)

do you know the latest? we live in a hologram maybe, the image reflected from the edges of the universe.... the mind boggles and the heart lightens

love judy
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'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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scribbler

Mon, 2012-08-06 18:10

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And between the atoms of our universe are atoms of innumerable other universes unseen by use because they vibrate on a different frequency.......Hey! there might be one in which I'm still young and handsome lol..........stan

weirdelf

Mon, 2012-08-06 05:22

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Apart from the last two lines this is a poem I would gladly plagiarise.
It's been a while since I could write with such lucid intelligence and craft. No, I'm not really jealous, I hold you and this work in the utmost respect.
But back to those last few lines. You do justify it with "so blatantly to some", that science is not really disappearing up its own arsehole as the creationists and other nutters deem. Still, you give them a look in. Remember that your readers own the final interpretation. I wouldn't have given the morons even that chance.

I'm not going to give you any crit on structure, it works fine for me because it reads well and carries the meaning. It is one of the things I truly appreciate about your presence on Neopoet. You, and Wesley, can give the detailed crit on structure that I used to bear virtually sole responsibility for, and it was boring me to tears. I nearly left.

Still, if you ask, I will point out a few minor things.

Fucking love this poem.

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judyanne

Mon, 2012-08-06 12:58

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where you find flaws.... i've contemplated them, especially the lengthened lines, and i don't mind the rhythm... but if anything really jars to you, scansion wise especially, i would appreciated your thoughts

lol - it's funny - i expected you to hate this :)
thanks jess
love judy xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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