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MELANCHOLY BLUE--Updated

Submitted by Geremia on Sun, 2012-11-25 13:28

MELANCHOLY BLUE

All that has died in me
lives in memory’s keep
shadows deep
melancholy blue

in a crcle never-ending
relentless and unforgiving
I am taken back back
to wounds ever bleeding

Who I am today
will die to tomorrow
and when the world I know
begins to fade a way
I sink
into shadows deep
melancholy blue.......

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Geezer

Sun, 2012-11-25 19:29

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to say the least. It takes me around and around. ~ Gee

This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place

Geremia

Sun, 2012-11-25 20:40

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Yes. Melancholy is a circle difficult to break, like some in Dante's INFERNO are swept away in a never ending circle of eternal fornication as punishment for some carnal sin. :)

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Geezer

Mon, 2012-11-26 03:25

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punishment? I don't see how, unless you can't stop to eat or drink and you get hungry and thirsty. LOL ~ Gee

This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place

Ross Hamilton Hill

Mon, 2012-11-26 00:42

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this seems more a song than a poem

shadows deep
memory’s keep
melancholy blue.

thats the chorus..

Geremia

Mon, 2012-11-26 06:03

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Yes, I could have made it lyrics.

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