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MELANCHOLY BLUE--Updated

MELANCHOLY BLUE

All that has died in me
lives in memory’s keep
shadows deep
melancholy blue

in a crcle never-ending
relentless and unforgiving
I am taken back back
to wounds ever bleeding

Who I am today
will die to tomorrow
and when the world I know
begins to fade a way
I sink
into shadows deep
melancholy blue.......

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to say the least. It takes me around and around. ~ Gee

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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Yes. Melancholy is a circle difficult to break, like some in Dante's INFERNO are swept away in a never ending circle of eternal fornication as punishment for some carnal sin. :)

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punishment? I don't see how, unless you can't stop to eat or drink and you get hungry and thirsty. LOL ~ Gee

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

this seems more a song than a poem

shadows deep
memory’s keep
melancholy blue.

thats the chorus..

Yes, I could have made it lyrics.

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