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Love's Elixir
She has slender hands,
They caress with care.
Her skin, soft and tanned.
Wild like a horse mane flows her hair.
Piercing and deep is her gaze.
As a moon lit ocean crashes its waves,
my heart stops when I hear her breathe.
Perfectly curved her body lays,
Like sunset; on lazy desert days.
I cannot escape this lovely bliss,
She calms my quarrels with a gentle kiss.
Sweeter than honeysuckles are her lips,
Moist and creamy the garden drips.
I love her more than Christ did the church,
Giving her the world, to show her worth.
Intertwined together like a cobra’s dance,
Her voice traps me in charmer’s trance.
When she’s near, my blood boils.
The foxes will be stopped, before the vine spoils.
When she is far, the lighthouse searches.
Like the eagle scans the sky while he perches.
My cup runneth over,
contents of intoxication leaking.
But this sea of love will stop the ship from sinking.
A vampire’s bite, a mermaid’s song-
It feels so right, it can’t be wrong.
Like the rapture pulling saints from the grave,
My love’s savor, I will always crave.
Comments
Teddy15
Tue, 2020-07-14 12:40
Dear Dramen85
So I am a huge fan of romance and can only hope that, she is real for you otherwise my heart will weep.
My fave line---
But this sea of love will stop the ship from sinking. At last I have read a love poem.
Your title I like because I knew what this was about!
Thank you...Teddy
Dramen85
Wed, 2020-07-15 11:45
Thanks Teddy,
Thanks Teddy,
This poem is about my wife, who I still have. We were engaged at the time when I wrote it.
Daniel Robichaud
Teddy15
Wed, 2020-07-15 12:11
Dear Dramen85
Well she's very lucky, I like what you did with your title.
Thank you...Teddy
raj
Tue, 2020-07-14 13:45
Hi Dramen
you have used great imagination while comparing various stages of your craving for your Love with other natural forms...i liked it immensely...
thanks for the treat....
.
raj (sublime_ocean)
c lynn brooks
Tue, 2020-07-14 17:01
Dramen
beautifully written. A poem this fine deserves a stronger title give it a try
your Dad was a fine man and I see you follow in his footsteps
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Dramen85
Wed, 2020-07-15 11:46
Thanks Brooks,
Thanks Brooks,
I changed the title to "Love's Elixir", I think that it resonates more with the content of the poem.
Daniel Robichaud
Lavender
Tue, 2020-07-14 22:03
My Love
Hello, Dramen,
Even though you have selected free verse, there does seem to be a structure here, maybe just a bit loose. Very tender. Sometimes I find a poem within a poem:
As a moonlit ocean crashes its waves,
my heart stops when I hear her breathe.
Perfectly curved, her body lays
like sunset on lazy desert days.
Beautiful!
Thank you!
Lavender
Dramen85
Wed, 2020-07-15 11:49
Thanks Lavender,
Thanks Lavender,
This one is about my wife, when I wrote it we were engaged. The feeling of being love was so strong for me I had to write a poem about it. I tried capturing that feeling with imagery from nature. Thank you for your input.
Daniel Robichaud
raj
Wed, 2020-07-15 12:43
Hi Danel
Good change in title...nice photo of you two ...
wish you both a long journey full of love...
be well..
raj (sublime_ocean)
Geezer
Thu, 2020-07-16 09:42
I can see...
the love just dripping from every branch here; and I can understand the reluctance to include it in the category of stuctured
western. However, it is a variety of structure and western. The structure is in the obvious rhyming of lines in a predictable manner. Good job. ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch
Fri, 2020-08-07 15:15
hello,
the whole poem is just breath taking! every line has perfect clarity. she is a lucky lady, for certain! fantastic work!
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Dramen85
Sat, 2020-08-08 13:00
Thank you. I did my best to
Thank you. I did my best to capture that feeling and essence of love.
Daniel Robichaud