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Love Lost

When you look at the world as a dream
That will never come true you lean
Towards any means to ignore the
Emotional torture that becomes your order
Just to sustain the judgement passed
Guilty. Filthy how I became, refined
Silly my frame of mind
To even hope for any differences
To switch the subjects of my sentences
With serenity, ending with sincerly yours
Thanking a love for lending me your
Heart. In return, I'll do the same
Apart is where I don't want to maintain
But I'm to blame.....
Heart. In return, I'll do the same

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Free verse
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If u could please ignore the last line after but I'm to blame in the full version. I had issues with the computer.
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Between nice and not so nice is confusing emotionally. Captures one though!

feb coming up soon...a time of cards passion romance...etc
and for those who love is a trap..treason..betrayal..unsteadiness..
a ruse...too much to handle emotionally..
its fodder for poetry...
and more..

I like those that can get love...get it all from many
and amazed at how they cant handle what they get
dont know what too do..
it doesnt satisfy them...
they are immune to feelings
deep down
and so they are safe for those to throw themselves
on because there is no real connection..

going through the motions
rather then Emotions..

Great Poem about emotional turmoil though
it gets even more complicated when there
are many signals given
in that more complex game..

thank you!

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