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I dabble into the void
To be as nonexistent
As what's not seen yet pretend I'm omniscient
Not recognizing the difference
I'm ego driven.....

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but then Im clever and high minded
(tested my IQ and Im quite high)
love the use of the word Omniscient
and the dinger..
I'm ego driven!

if we had no ego
per say..
India would have no Ghandi
for it was the snub to his
pride that he rose against
the class of the british
and of course ultimately
was assasinated..But he
got independence for his
They never would have
gotten the Bomb either
without him!

He dabbled into the void
walking every footstep
His worth in Salt!

the pinch for what its

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Thank you. You made a very good and motivational point about ghandi.

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