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lonely dreams tanka
My friend, yellow lined
Made my lonely dreams come true
Gold collections grew
Images in my minds eye
Gems etched in italic print
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Structured: Eastern
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weirdelf
Tue, 2012-04-03 01:59
Exquisitely etched
a lovely tanka.
No crit. Although I hate poems in italics, the metaphor works.
cheers,
Jess
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Barbara Writes
Tue, 2012-04-03 11:07
thanks
I like seeing words in italics it has a softness to it. like you mentioned the metaphor work well. Glad you like it
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