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Living Tomb

I'm a living tomb
my baby has died in my womb

I have to let nature take its course
Can't bear this, what could be worse?

I'm still getting many a smile
people don't know my turmoil

My baby has died
I still haven't cried
the sadness buried inside

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Firat of all may I offer my condolences for your tragic situation and condition? This happened to my Aunt, several years ago. I remember her long months of sorrow. It broke my heart to see. The whole poem expresses a spirit put on hold. It made me cry. I found these words very poignant:

My baby has died
I still haven't cried
the sadness buried inside

I wish you the best and much happiness in your future.

always, Cat

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Hi Candlewitch this is not personal to me but one I had to write a sensitive and sad subject I purposely kept it simple thanks for a wonderful comment x

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