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Smothered

Burying my own wants under some man’s
keeping them locked away
but there still there, never go astray
lurking in the shadows of my mind

Raising their head now and then
but smothered by his needs
pandering to his whim
nothing matters but him

That was before I discovered self-esteem
realised I can chase my own dream
knowledge makes me feel supreme
grinning like the cat that got the cream

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Structured: Western
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a correction
but there [they're] still there, never go astray.

You are taking your poetry seriously and doing it well.

Don't forget to be funny sometimes though!

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Managing Directors, with Richard (themoonman)

thanks Jess and I'll fix the they're cheers x

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