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Expectant

Handcuffed

Bound

to a chair

Blindfold

tethered

wet down there

Scared

excited

nipples bare

Arched

prepared

expectant air

Frustrated

unsated

not fair

Ahh, finally, he’s here

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Structured: Western
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...and I thought it was Esker's. Good work creating the imagery with single words and short phrases.

I don't see the deliberate structure in this though, but it's lovely.

No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot

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thanks a mil William cheers x

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And in full form!
Wow

yep been a bit ill glad you enjoyed cheers x

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Just a word then a thought and another word..
Well done, though I am not in favour of bondage,
whatever switches you on lol
Take care out there in that Emerald plain, Yours Ian.T, again.

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I'm not either Ian just a poem lol thanks x

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Sorry to hear you've been ill but glad you're better. I expect the clipped form of this might well reflect a woman's thoughts in that situation. Only thing I'd think about changing is "sated" , I think perhaps satiated is what you intended............stan

Hi Stan thanks for reading and commenting and your good wishes appreciated x

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At first I thought it was an ironical comment about the bondage of a woman in labour, except "Blindfold" and "nipples bare" belied that. Bondage I have no problem with however there are over-tones of rape fantasy, which I find distasteful in the extreme.

A troublesome poem. I really don't know what to make of it.

cheers,
Jess
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Hi Jess I'm not into bondage or anything like it had a conversation about 50 shades and this poem was written after it all the best x

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