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Little Man

Submitted by Timbo on Wed, 2022-08-17 10:53

There was joy, there was sorrow
there was darkness, there was light.
And then you came to be among us
on a cold and winter’s night.

The little miracle, we had hoped for
a gift to a father, of a son.
For this Grandad, a little playmate
And time together, full of fun.

For your Mother, what she hoped for
and it seemed would never come.
A little bundle of hope and joy
her very precious baby son.

With your smile you make us happy
if you’re sad we feel it too.
And our lives are so much better
when we spend our time with you.

You and me, we play together
football, cars, Spider-Man too.
In a world of fun and fantasy
that’s created by me and you.

When you grow to be older
and I can no longer be.
Hold me tight in your heart
and just remember me,

Review Request (Intensity):

Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)

Last few words:

My daughter gave birth to this little man in her forties. Medical circumstances made it difficult for her to stay pregnant and then, four years ago, the miracle happened. © 13 minutes ago, Tim Kitchen love • family • rhyme

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Geezer

Wed, 2022-08-17 19:49

This is...

a great poem about the wishes and hopes of a grandfather for a little boy grandchild, that will carry on the legacy of his name and the great joy and expectations that come of it. Really good meter and rhyme. Nice job! ~ Geezer.
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Timbo

Thu, 2022-08-18 10:07

thanks

Thanks,
It's been a while since I was able to write anything, so thanks for the encouragement,

Take care,
Tim

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Rosewood Apothecary

Thu, 2022-08-18 06:43

Congratulations!

Struggles with fertility are so stressful. I have a niece I feel the same way about. My sister tried with her husband for seven years and treatments and saving embryos. In the end she had some fibroids removed and became pregnant immediately after. Like you say medical conditions were preventing viable pregnancies. I have a son that is 6 months older so it was an exciting phone call to learn that my sister was also pregnant. I remember I was in the kitchen at the stove cooking hamburgers and stinking up the house when she called to tell me. I’ll always remember that as long as I live.

I’m so happy for you and your family! Enjoy yourselves, revel in those fantasy games they’ll soon be memories!

Great job
Tim (a different one)

Timbo

Thu, 2022-08-18 10:10

good news

Thank you Tim,
Great to hear of your family good news too.
All the best,
Tim

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Lavender

Thu, 2022-08-18 22:41

Little Man

Hello, Timbo,
Very tender! Truly a miracle! I hope you can frame this, somehow keep it preserved. It will become even more precious and meaningful as your grandson grows up.
Best to you all!
Lavender

Timbo

Sat, 2022-08-20 10:28

Thank you, for your kind

Thank you, for your kind comments, Tim

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