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Christmas Eve

Door bells ringing, children singing
Christmas songs, just for you.
Joy they bring, with smiling faces
hoping for a coin or two.

Church bells ringing, choirs singing
Christmas carols by candlelight.
As the faithful come to worship
on this special holy night.

Lights are on the Christmas tree
pretty colours reflect on the wall.
Excited little ones, trying to sleep
hoping Santa, will come to call.

In the church they speak of shepherds
and angels coming from above.
Of how Christ was born of Mary
the prince of peace and love.

There are parties, with happy people
who are full of Christmas cheer.
Dancing, singing and laughing
and enjoying their food and beer.

At the church, the mass is over
so the congregation drift away.
Night becomes a new tomorrow.
and at last, it’s Christmas day.

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Comments

What a lovely poem this is. Full of happiness and cheer. You have captured the excitement of Christmas eve.

I like the touch of humour and the way you have keep the true meaning of Christmas alive!

Well done - delightful to read..

Love Mand xxxxxx

Thanks, really appreciate your comments Mand. Oh and 'merry Christmas' to you and yours.
best wishes.
Tim

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this really adds little to the Christmas idea, and nothing to its poetry.

To be fair, you made an earnest attempt, but sincerity does not poetry make.

cheers,
Jess
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Thanks for the response Jess, well one can't please everybody, all of the time. Sincerity can be part of poetry just as much as anything else. We obviously have different opinions. Well there's a surprise!!
And if you can cope with a bit more of my sincerity, I wish you a happy christmas and a healthy new year.

tk

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and wishing you the same.

And my sincere apologies also for my horribly inappropriate comment on your other poem. I have deleted it.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

Thanks Jess,

cheers,
Tim

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