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The golden disc spreading
massaging the back of the
coloured Sand and the aquamarine

froth salted rolling waves.
The sea trumpet squawks of

long gull calls as the head
and lowers

Its side to side gait is on familiar

horseshoe land

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Thank you for sharing your poem titled "LIFE'S A BEACH." I appreciate your creativity and use of vivid imagery to describe the beach scene. Here are a few suggestions to enhance your poem:

1. Consider adding more sensory details: While you have included some sensory details like "golden spreading fingers" and "aquamarine froth," you could further engage the reader's senses by incorporating more descriptive language. For example, you could describe the scent of the sea, the feel of the sand beneath the feet, or the sound of the crashing waves.

2. Develop the theme: It seems that your poem is centered around the beach and the experience of being there. To strengthen the theme, you could explore deeper emotions or reflections associated with the beach. This could involve delving into personal memories, contemplating the passage of time, or exploring the connection between nature and human existence.

3. Consider the structure: The structure of your poem is free verse, which allows for flexibility and creativity. However

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...not really warming up to those line breaks, they seem wildly out of place. Maybe you meant it that way? The imagery is the best part. I could imagine the writer as a seagull.


. like my lost dreams...the flood

I guess I wanted it looking neat not necessarily perfect line brakes but readable to the reader

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