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legally entitled views
on second thought
legal tender
could have been construed
as legal money
but legally tender
is all about any honey,
anyone can so decide
these metaphorical views
which are impossible to hide".
you have had a say
your way
but folks will see your implications
their own personal way,
so take away or give in
what is this?
but a delight which resides
in the inner hearts recesses
of a poet deep within
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
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Comments
loved
Tue, 2013-02-05 12:03
your wisdom
if not shared
will be a mistake
no learner can afford to make
my poetry is already at stake
the beautiful amendments
I will ...not shall ...make
as they emanate from the quill
who is the MOST outspoken poet still
Thanks Beau your version and feelings are so true.
.
loved
loved
Tue, 2013-02-05 12:28
crypt
is a dear poetic friend
as you all are
i thought
as you did ...
and with him i am explicit
we must make sure not to hurt feelings
and yet be friendly at the same time
as we express our views poetically
and that's what Neopoet is all about
Thanks....
Beau
Kind regards
loved
Frenchf
Tue, 2013-02-05 13:29
Ah
the interactions with the poem interest me
Geezer
Tue, 2013-02-05 14:44
I think...
that to rewrite this and leave out or change the [ you's ] would change the direction of this poem. I like that it speaks to us in the first person. I feel that it needs to speak like this, to give the opinion most clearly. ~ Gee
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place
loved
Wed, 2013-02-06 07:35
Are you okay
with this new version
do say
if you may
loved