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Just to hold a pebble
quietly, in my hand

may not seem important
‘less one was stuck in sand.

How important a conversation
if one was all alone,

without replies or feedback
one would stir to quest, his own.

Just to see a child's eyes, razzle
Because of the butterfly on her hand !

it’s remarkable for what one yearns
no one could ever understand.

Just to hold a pebble
because you handed it to me,

we’ll forever share that moment, rare
individually for eternity.

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Last few words: 
This is a re-write, or rather.....the beginning of one; of sorts. At any rate, suffice it to say, ths was, much...............much, worse ! This selfless act of "attrition", on my part; MAY.....(quite possibly, AND; probably).....will endeavor, (to convince the heavens, on my behalf); to keep me outta, "Hell", where I completely understand that: there IS, no toilette paper. doc.
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