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it still lingers

Submitted by loved on Sat, 2013-04-27 11:44

not so good... your fear of death -

if man can overcome fear
of the unknown, death
man will rise
without any surprise
above all inner collusion
and confusion

the path of arrival by now we all know
the exit is no secret
but we all love to dwell
in life so mysterious …
we all conjecture that's about all
we fear and make an enemy live within,
as by now we know
all will
be well till
we leave for heaven or hell..
so live in fear
if only you want to
your lives fruitlessly kill….

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

Josephus

Sun, 2013-04-28 14:53

Josephus's picture

Fear of death is a universal anxiety, it seems. You describe that well. More importantly you address the overcoming of that fear as a way of becomming more fulfilled in our live!

Well done, my sweet friend, well done.

Joe

My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.

loved

Sun, 2013-04-28 15:04

loved's picture

you hold my heart in poetry
as I shudder
under your rudder
will some one bait me
sweet friend as you call me
brotherly
hopefully
not at each portly

loved

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