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i lay in you

i stray in you,
frowardly,
in your keep,
pallidly
aware of your
panting crest,
deftly,
in your
wake

your savvy,
frailly,
indicating
our course,
along the shores
of a traversed brim.

i lay in you,
resigned
to the sway
of your waves
(of age)
rekindling the
memoirs
of an age

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The poem flows delicately wherein you have given gilt edges to memories. Pleasure to read this..thanks...

raj (sublime_ocean)

I really loved your poem but I have a couple of queries ? I will post below

i stray in you, -- did you mean 'stray' or 'stay' ?
frowardly, -- [forwardly]
in your keep,
pallidly
aware of your
panting crest,
deftly,
in your
wake

your savvy,
frailly, -- [frailty] ?
indicating
our course,
along the shores
of a traversed brim.

Lovely to see you posting again I really enjoyed this one take care

love JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

frowardly,!!!!!
at times I too create newer whords
as did Shakespeare like this
'''' whords ...''''
when i want to express
da dum dee dee
kind of syllable
as in shoneets...
sonnets
I can't write all know

you will have to read me more
if about me
you want to know
more 4 sure

thanx for your visit ladies. frowardness is an archaic usage for headstrong/ self-willed.

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here nokros who are the lassies here hahahaa

have a nice day

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