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i lay in you
i stray in you,
frowardly,
in your keep,
pallidly
aware of your
panting crest,
deftly,
in your
wake
your savvy,
frailly,
indicating
our course,
along the shores
of a traversed brim.
i lay in you,
resigned
to the sway
of your waves
(of age)
rekindling the
memoirs
of an age
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Comments
raj
Sat, 2014-02-01 15:42
Hi Nokros
The poem flows delicately wherein you have given gilt edges to memories. Pleasure to read this..thanks...
raj (sublime_ocean)
Seren
Sun, 2014-02-02 10:13
Hello !
I really loved your poem but I have a couple of queries ? I will post below
i stray in you, -- did you mean 'stray' or 'stay' ?
frowardly, -- [forwardly]
in your keep,
pallidly
aware of your
panting crest,
deftly,
in your
wake
your savvy,
frailly, -- [frailty] ?
indicating
our course,
along the shores
of a traversed brim.
Lovely to see you posting again I really enjoyed this one take care
love JC xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
lovedly
Sat, 2015-02-14 16:35
me too
frowardly,!!!!!
at times I too create newer whords
as did Shakespeare like this
'''' whords ...''''
when i want to express
da dum dee dee
kind of syllable
as in shoneets...
sonnets
I can't write all know
you will have to read me more
if about me
you want to know
more 4 sure
nokros
Sun, 2015-02-15 03:21
JC, lovedly
thanx for your visit ladies. frowardness is an archaic usage for headstrong/ self-willed.
lovedly
Sun, 2015-02-15 12:12
who are the lassies
here nokros who are the lassies here hahahaa
nokros
Sun, 2015-02-15 12:54
LADIES
have a nice day