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I Hope...

The most important people are
my family and friends, they are my life
I try so hard to be positive around them
but I'm feeling weird, something isn't right

I'm OK sometimes, but mostly....
There are times when I get a good start
I get things done
Then it's right back to feeling unsure
not knowing what to do

I am so proud of my kids, I love them
They seem proud of me too, but I'm not sure
I think about what I should have done

Could I have done better?
Maybe I should give them more hugs
tell them I love them more often
I appreciate you....

Maybe you have the same problems
wondering why there is so much hatred
Sadness everywhere
Feeling weird....

I think about all the people
The good stuff
The bad stuff
I hope I'm not alone....

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Written in collaboration with my son, who is a father himself.
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I feel the same every day. I ask myself the same questions. You've done a great job, in my eyes.

Keep Writing,

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

you get the feeling that you are all alone, that no one knows how you feel, then a person will give you the boost that you need to find the strength to carry on. I am blessed to have good friends and family. Thank you. ~ Gee.

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You are an amazing man, one of the best people I know, I know life's not been easy for you but you my friend are most definately loved. Don't ever doubt that. I'll hang round as long as I can to remind you of this

Love and higgliest bugs Sis xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

in collaboration with my son, who is having a more difficult time than I. As I tried to rearrange the words and make sense of what he was telling me, I realized that I feel a lot of the same things that he does. We have a common trait between us. Anxiety and depression. We try hard to make sense of the world around us and harder still to develop a sense of self worth. Most days, it is hard to just get out of bed and get going. The turmoil of life bears hard on me, but even harder on my son. I only wish that I could take the burden from his shoulders and give him the reassurance to make his life more bearable. Thank you for your love and friendship, it means so much! Love and higgest bugs ~ Gee.

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Oh friendly one Geez

We all are in a similar boat
some accidentally say

we all have sails
some boats have pin holes
others a bit larger too
a bucket size have very few

Once I asked my friend
how is your boat
He said
As was yours but with a difference
my hole, in the boat was four feet above
so I could use a bucket
back to the sea the water deliver
and so I sail a bit longer

when my hands so get tired
and my kids kick me in my ass
I too will then wish to pass
they will also love the
Bye pass

My boat does have a hole in it and I bail water furiously day after day. I know that I can keep going as long as I have friends like you to give me encouragement. My son and I will keep bailing water and we will manage to stay afloat. ~ Gee.

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How well I know these two foes...thank goodness for those who love us when we feel unlovable..makes carrying on much easier

Keep Writing,

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

from poet friend

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