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I am sailing Alone

I sail through the sea of life that strikes
no matter the whirl wind that is swirling
day after day I keep sailing as likes
because of capacity of God I keep calling

I sail through the darkest moment
day after day the blue sea turns black
fear and trembling was also prominent
I was almost lost 'cause I was looking back

my trail on the sea level was diminishing
no scribe was taking inventory of my fishing
I'm the solitary captain on the high sea level
I'm smothered by climate that i never revel

I know I'm sailing alone but not quite alone
there's a supreme being that goes before me
whether the sea threats me like fierce bee
I fear not for His presence is able to stone

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

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my wish for you is that you always have smooth sailing with the winds at your back! these are my favorite lines of your poem. especially the very last line!

I sail through the darkest moment
day after day the blue sea turns black
fear and trembling was also prominent
I was almost lost 'cause I was looking back

*hugs, Cat

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Cat you also have a bird's eye view to pick good things...!!!
This very stanza is just my favourite! Thank you very much for reading through.

My regards!

"Poetic license
gives
the poets
the free will to
embroider a good tale
and deviate from the established rules of language"~Jackweb

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You have made a very convincing picture with your words here!
Like Cat, I am fondest of the same stanza. ~ Geez.
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O my goodness! I feel elated any day any time I receive a positive response from my verses. Thank you very much for reading through sir!

"Poetic license
gives
the poets
the free will to
embroider a good tale
and deviate from the established rules of language"~Jackweb

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