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HEAVEN GATE ( Written by my friend, Alex Muriuki)

Submitted by Jackweb on Sun, 2023-06-25 21:22

Facts are worth more than a thousand words
Am drawing it out
The blood in my veins
With the earth rotating in my brain
All they say I understand is pain
All knowledge exploding in my mind
Human fading
With everything precipitating
Reality entails all the sooth
Shouting in the booth
Attraction of the grounded silence
Paving way to the strange case
Deep down roaming innuendos
Carried away to uncontrollable destination
Swayed swerved to unbelievable stage
To the point you never get the chance to engage
Sometimes the clouds are clear
Even in the silent night can hear
The unsaid story
Of our history
Hope the light of God shines to the universe
As the key unlocking every barrier in this sweet transverse
Reality is making sense
As faith with action stand
I will never cease to shout and glorify His name
For everyday is a step to the destiny
I know soon He will welcome me when the star of journey deems or shine
It's no longer dark story
But I won't worry in the light
For the future is now bright
The new path on earth
When then be ready
Heaven gate is open.

©️®️ Alex Muriuki

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Mon, 2023-06-26 03:22

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Thank you for sharing this poem. "Heaven Gate" is a poem that explores the idea of faith and the hope of a better future. The poem's use of imagery is quite effective in conveying the speaker's emotions and thoughts. The line "All they say I understand is pain" is particularly powerful and conveys a sense of isolation and despair.

The poem's structure is free verse, which allows for a more natural flow of ideas and emotions. However, there are some areas where the poem could benefit from more attention to structure and form. For example, some lines could be broken up to create a more rhythmic flow.

The poem's message is clear and heartfelt, and the use of religious imagery and language adds depth and meaning to the poem. Overall, this is a strong poem that could benefit from some minor adjustments to structure and form.

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