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Has a lot of potential. I would suggest breaking the paragraph into stanzas and capitalizing the first letter of each stanza as well as adding more detail, moving words around to help the flow and rhyme:

That time of year again
The crisp crunchy snow beneath our feet (added here)
The cold breath of death outside (switched words here)
Followed by cheers and laughter, how sweet

I really like the tone and content of the poem as the holidays are not merry for everyone and I think we forget that as a society. I am curious to see where you take these revisions, if any. Good job

I really appreciated your holiday poem. It took me back to a time when the days were not great. my first husband abandoned me after making my pregnancy an emotional and verbal terror. I think that there are a lot of people who have negative holiday memorabilia.

your poem makes me appreciate what I have now. the lines:

so don't listen to the gurus that say you can be happy by believing in God or the universe
It won't provide and manifest what you want . I hope you realise it doesn't work it cant
so put on your Christmas paper crinkled hat and ignore the false shit chat enjoy the hot turkey gravy
Pouring down like a flowing River on your warm wet roast dinner mountains of crispy roast here's a toast

because there is a Pagan/Wiccan holiday called Yule which was taken over by Christians to entice them into accepting the revised holiday. religion has always been a way of controlling the masses.

*I see you plan on reworking this piece, and I would love to read it when you do.If you could write: (Revised) in the title then it will invite more readers. by-the-way it is very nice to meet you!

*Hugs. Cat