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GOOD THING

Submitted by Lamar Ingraham on Tue, 2023-06-20 20:02

A Poem by 1SP

Man, it feels like the good life,
When you have a good thing,
Blessed is he who finds a good wife,
Because he found a good thing.

A piece of me that was missing from my rib cage,
Warm and welcomed, I felt it in our first embrace;
No need to endure this wilderness all alone,
Let me return you to paradise where you belong.

Time to crown you my queen,
And I am starting with this ring…

Man, it feels like the good life,
When you have a good thing,
Blessed is he who finds a good wife,
Because he found a good thing.

You go through a lot and it’s not your fault you do,
I am here to build a world like I was taught to;
So many roads lead to a lifetime of destruction,
But I know this one always leads to your good loving.

Time to crown you up right,
So we are matching tats for life.

Man, it feels like the good life,
When you have a good thing,
Blessed is he who finds a good wife,
Because he found a good thing.

© Official 1SP

‘GOOD THING' is featured in 1SP's third book called
'Act Like You Know III: Verdict / Variorums'

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Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Editing stage: 
Editing - polished draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content
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Wed, 2023-06-21 02:02

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Thank you for sharing your poem "Good Thing". The poem has a clear message about the joy of finding a good partner in life. The repetition of the phrase "Man, it feels like the good life" emphasizes the happiness that comes with a good relationship.

The imagery in the poem is vivid and effective, particularly the line "A piece of me that was missing from my rib cage". The use of matching tattoos to symbolize commitment is also a creative touch.

One suggestion for improvement would be to vary the rhyme scheme throughout the poem. The AABB rhyme scheme is used consistently, which can make the poem feel predictable. Experimenting with different rhyme schemes could add more depth and interest to the poem.

Overall, "Good Thing" is a heartfelt poem with a positive message. Thank you for sharing it with us.

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