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Good Nighty Night with the Sandman

I'm sleepy as heck
trying to play gummy drop
I'm tired of being up this late
far far into the wee hours of dawn.

Ohh! I'm rocking to the right
and rocking to the left
awaken by my body motion
which kept me from falling to the floor.

I think I'll call it "lights out"
and say "good nighty night"
with my stylus in hand I'm played
gummy drop on my iPhone with the sandman.

I hope I'll win level 17
with these five remaining moves
to complete this game
then I'll fall a sleep.
Before its too late

Ohh! I ran out of moves
and I've not enough coins
to continue this game
so it must end.

With one life remaining, I must play
again before I lay down my head
on my brand new, black and comfy pillow
that says "I love you more".

With black and white hearts
my pillow sung "I love you more"
with red and white letters
soft and fluffy under my neck.

I can't believe this! I lost this game
because I took too long with these two deeds
writing this poem while playing gummy drop
or I'd been stretch out on my low comfy bed.

I've another life after my time expired
I think I'll play, hope to win
so I can bring insomnia to an end
these meds are starting to take me to
a dreamy land.

Oh gosh, be gosh! I've won the level
I've 60 coins and 590 red bricks to claim
with one life play and another coming 2:10 this morning
I gotta play til I win again or pass out on my iPad.

It's getting down to the wire
and my sleepy eyes are tired
I don't know if I'll pass out
or win or lost.

Yes, yes! game over level 18
I've lost my last life,
no more hearts to play gummy drop
as they all flew away
I'm putting down this phone
before I change my mind.

Sleep tight tonight my dear me
I think I'll call it "lights out"
and say "good nighty night"
my stylus is playing my game in scribbles
on my iPhone with the sandman no more.

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you repeat the 3rd stanza at the every end.. Is this another writing style I've not learnt? Hmmmm

Alid

I'm not sure why I repeated. I think I was thinking of a song when I wrote it. Often refrain are repeated. Moe than likely what I was thinking. I need to revise this

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A fun read Barb
I enjoyed this - it put a smile on my face too

I don't play gummy drop, but other things keep me up late
And do you say what I do when I finally get to bed?...
'××groan (of relief to tired limbs)×× Why on Earth didn't I come here earlier!!!'

thanks for sharing
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

I'm glad you read me and like this fun write. I see some edits I want to make .

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